100 Word Challange – Week 49: Power serve

His muscles were drained and the sweat was all he could taste. But there was no time for weakness now, no room for error. This was his moment. The crowd went still as he stepped to the line. He could end the game in one final swing, and they knew it.

Murray was just about to serve for the Championship when he noticed it. The ball did not bounce like it should have; instead it had a weight to it that shifted like water.  Shaking it off as simple nerves, Andy swung with all his power. Only to see his racket carve the ball into droplets and wash over him.

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Its hard to come so close, and still be so far. Almost like victory was simply washed away. So that’s what I saw with this prompt.

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15 thoughts on “100 Word Challange – Week 49: Power serve

  1. Mayumi-H says:

    That first paragraph has a lot of really nice imagery to it. I like what you did with the water, too: the senses becoming reality.
    Nice work, here!

    • Thank you much!
      I wasn’t sure which would be worse here, smashing and bouncing off one’s sense of gloom, or having it splash and coat them. In this case, I just thought this one worked better.
      Glad you like it!

  2. lorrainefort says:

    trusting your instincts, your intuition, is really hard, no matter the circumstance. Nicely done. 🙂

  3. uwlalum says:

    Interesting take on the prompt. Very descriptive.

  4. Miriam says:

    Wow, that’s interesting! Almost like painting his feelings.

  5. DancingInTheRain) says:

    This. Is beautifully written and a great idea – excellent transformation of what is no more than a feeling.

  6. boomiebol says:

    Very nice…well done

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