100 Word Challenge – Week 52.1: Flicker

It didn’t matter that his quarters were barely tidied up after the last skirmish. It didn’t matter that the roast chicken he had bartered tooth and nail for was saved only by a liberal helping of teriyaki sauce. It didn’t even faze them that the haphazardly-built music system he had made only had one working speaker or that the environmental lighting may not come back on anytime soon.

All Tyko could hear right now was Rema’s snuggled breaths against his sternum as they swayed. Together the flames and their shadows waltzed along the walls as he held her tightly. Nothing could spoil that.

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Entry #1 for this week’s 100 Word Challenge from Julia’s Place. I honestly don’t think I write bits like this enough, so I hope this one does well. Enjoy!

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14 thoughts on “100 Word Challenge – Week 52.1: Flicker

  1. Ventahl says:

    Well enough. I felt was there. Moments like These are what its all about. Very easy Natural style you have.

  2. Mayumi-H says:

    There’s an underlying sense of sombre fatefulness, here, that I still really like. The brokenness (or broken-down-ness) of their surroundings tells a lot. Lovely, yet sad.

    Nice work!

  3. Sandra says:

    Nicely done! I enjoyed this.

  4. Uwlalum says:

    I can just picture them dancing in the shadows. Great work!

  5. Gilly Gee says:

    Yes well done, there are some undercurrents that create a good atmosphere.

  6. jfb57 says:

    What a fantastic scene you’ve set here. I have remembrances of a room like that! So. Glad it was a happy ending!

  7. This is my favorite line … “snuggled breaths against his sternum as they swayed.” There was a nice flow and at the end I really didn’t want it to end. An enjoyable short read. ~~~~ : – )

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