100 Word Challenge – Week 55.2: Nuzzles For All

“Something’s out there, and its close”, Lohnes whispered.

“I hear it.” Tal answered, before the rustling leaves gave way to a leaping mass of color and fuzziness. The animal hopped across her arm and settled atop her shoulder, scanning the area from its new perch.

“Daniel, look! It’s so cute!”

He turned, coming face to face with framed feline fascination embroidered in a rainbow wreath and twin tails twitching along her cheek. All of which told Lohnes that he had just picked up a new crewmember. “You’re lucky you like to nuzzle.”

“So are you.” Tal replied with a sly grin.

“How did you know that?” came the cat’s meow, much to the stunned silence of the humans.

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Entry #2 for this week’s 100 Word Challenge. And judging on how… unusual this picture prompt was in the beginning, maybe the felines have more than meets the eye.

I hope you all enjoy!

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2 thoughts on “100 Word Challenge – Week 55.2: Nuzzles For All

  1. Mayumi-H says:

    Nice sci-fi tone, but the lightness of it really shines through. I also enjoy the subtle flirtation between Tal and Lohnes.

    A couple things: remember to keep your punctuation within the quotation marks (“Something’s out there, and its close,”). And I had to reread when you said, “Daniel.” For a piece so short, you want the reader to instantly recognize who’s who. If Daniel is Lohnes’s first name, you can intro him as “Daniel Lohnes” so the reader isn’t confused when you use either name later.

    I really liked it, though!

  2. Noted and noted. I wanted to try this out, since you use your Fearless storyline sometimes and I use these characters, but you are right that I should keep them as either first or last name or both and not switch around so the reader can keep track in 100 words.
    Thanks for the feedback!

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