Five Sentence Fiction: Thoughts of a Demon

He wondered how many of them had faces turned to the morning sun as he approached, only to scan the skies for an Eagle’s roar.

He wondered how many of his opponents panicked when they saw the hellhound on his nose screaming into their homes.

He wondered how many his comrades took to the sky with him for no other reason than to be under his care, placing all faith in his title and record above even their own abilities.

He wondered how many of them saw the steel rain come down from his wings to forever burn their gazes heavenward.

Cipher wondered aloud, for the sake of saving the lives of his own home and fellow warriors, if being the Demon Lord had finally cost him his conscience.


Entry #1 in this week’s Five Sentence Fiction contest from Lillie McFerrin. This week’s theme was ‘Faces’ and this is half of the first thing I thought of. Sometimes I wonder if I overstep myself, submitting 2+ 100-Word-Challenges, 2 of these this week, and who knows about Free Write Friday. But this is what came to me, so I want to share it with you.

I hope you all enjoy!

8 thoughts on “Five Sentence Fiction: Thoughts of a Demon

  1. catnipoflife says:

    Demons are usually not my first choice of reading but this is really good, especially considering the theme and the fact you are limited to only five lines. My first thought was vampires.

  2. Interesting to get the thought process of a Demon here. I like it!

  3. Sandra says:

    I assumed this was related to the Belkan Wars video game, of which I know little. But as a piece of prose it was very effectively put across. Nicely done.

    • You are quite correct. And that’s okay that you do not know the game that well. In my view, I should be able to bring the character to life an let you get to know him this way, and I hope I have succeeded even a little bit.
      I’m glad you enjoyed Sandra!

  4. Mayumi-H says:

    I like the simplicity in this one, especially the break between paragraphs. It’s very clear, very concise, yet the images remain powerful. Nice observation about Cipher’s emotional callousness, too. I figure that would occur with a lot of soldiers.

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