100 Word Challenge – Week 57: Weak Spot

He knew it was wrong the moment they arrived at his flat. She was a coworker, a junior at that. But all thoughts stopped the moment she pulled his lips down to hers. After that, only reckless desire was heard. The need for him to end a barren drought of existence and remember what life tasted like. Her wish to leave the hurtful world behind for just one night and smile again.

Now, there was no returning to the routine. Nothing would wipe away the feeling of warmth from her ensnare, or the sad smile that came with the dawn of the next day.

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My entry for this week’s 100 Word Challenge for Julia’s Place. (What’s this? Only one entry?!) It’s been a hectic week, but the moment I saw the prompt, this wrote itself in one flurry of keystrokes.

I hope you all enjoy!

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19 thoughts on “100 Word Challenge – Week 57: Weak Spot

  1. Sally says:

    An emotive piece, well written.

  2. This story has so much potential for lives disrupted and heartache, or perhaps true love. I want more.

  3. Mayumi-H says:

    Nice! I always like the conflict presented in these affairs of the heart, whether it leads to something more or not. Good work expressing the wrongness (but rightness, however temporary) of the situation.

    • Thank you Mayumi! As I do more and more scenes like this that involve the heart more than the fist, I think I am understanding more on your love for them.
      Still, I’m happy you liked this one, as you might yet be seeing more of it.

  4. There’s a story waiting to be told. Nicely done in so few words.

  5. Paul says:

    Been there, done that. A long time ago in a land far, far away. I love your writing. Only one small problem (for me). The focus shifting from the male perspective to the female’s in the same paragraph was disconcerting. Mine’s at http://photovignettes.wordpress.com/2012/09/13/the-routine/. I would love to hear what you think.

  6. Delft says:

    Another unexpected one. Lovely.
    And I thought this week’s round might turn out to be a tad sameish…

  7. Very well done and very enjoyable x

  8. I found this very interesting and realistic, even though I was struck by the sudden inclusion of the word ensnare. Her motives at the end of the first paragraph were much like his. That may speak to what Paul was saying.

    If this was consistently about the male protagonist’s impressions, he could be thinking anything, whether it’s true or not.

    • You are quite right about keeping to the one perspective and how it lends itself to a lot more than one possibility. And each of them had the weak spot that got them there, to make them both pay the cost.
      I’m happy you enjoyed this one!

  9. judithatwood says:

    Oh, dear, this is so very familiar. You could have taken those words out of my head, several different times in my life. Great 100WCGU!

  10. lorrainefort says:

    Believe I read this and didn’t know what to say…that yearning for a rekindling of passion, of connection, is familiar to us all–especially when your relationship is not on the peak of passion at the moment. and yet there are boundaries to be respected, even with desire. Nicely done. 🙂

  11. stories4tots says:

    Oh yikes! Yup, there’s no going back to the routine once that line is crossed with an office mate. I like how you were able to put so much emotion in just a few words.

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