Five Sentence Fiction: Zombies

They were the lost, the dammed, the haunted and the useless. Souls that had been corrupted and rotten alive, only to wander among the living as broken proxies of greed, lust and want. They knew only their appetites, and care for little else, not even the dead they step over to satisfy. And as I stand before the swarm, I can only clear my weapon, and pray that should I fall here that there isn’t enough left of me to join their ranks.

“Ladies and Gentlemen of Congress, I stand before you today, proud of my title as representative of the people, something all of you seem to have forgotten…”

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I hate politics, I really do. Triple so during election years. But as I watch the ads banter back and forth, I start to think of ways to make things better once again. And how it is my responsibility as an American citizen to try and do so. And that idea might just inspire me to run for office myself one day, and forge my own trail.
This is my entry for the weekly Five Sentence Fiction by Lillie McFerrin.

I hope you all enjoy!

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15 thoughts on “Five Sentence Fiction: Zombies

  1. McGuffyAnn says:

    Nice take on Zombies! Thanks!
    McGuffy’s Reader
    http://www.mcguffysreader.blogspot.com

  2. Andrew says:

    I didn’t see that one coming – well done!

  3. Sisyphus47 says:

    Reads strangely real: why couldn’t see them before? 🙂

  4. What an inventive take on the prompt and such an apt view of politicians. Excellent.

  5. Lauren says:

    Bravo! Loved the emphasis on politics. Their brains are rotten.

  6. Both topical and realistic! Great fun!

  7. Mayumi-H says:

    Nice job with the descriptions, and with the twist. I like the way your narrator likens the political process to a battlefield…which it very much is, in many ways.

    Be a little bit careful with your tenses. The narrator looking back into the past for the mistakes of his/her fellows is good, and makes the present-tense determination stronger. But, for example, this sentence: They knew only their appetites, and care for little else, not even the dead they step over to satisfy. The descriptions work and sound good, but the tenses feel conflicting; I’d suggest making all the verbs past tense, or all of them present.

    I feel your consternation, too, especially during these months leading to election. I actually try to stay away from political ads and shows, and instead try to concentrate solely on the issues I want to support or defend. But the candidates also tend to get so busy wheeling-and-dealing that even those issues they claim are important can fall to the side in favor of political advancement.

    This is somewhat off-topic, but have you seen either “The Wire” or “Forbrydelsen”? Both series deal with crime at a visceral level (homicide detectives), but also from a political one. They’re both fantastically written, if somewhat bleak at points. I recommend them, if you can get past some of the character pitfalls (which I actually find interesting, but that’s just me).

  8. Thanks Mayumi!
    I see what you mean about the tenses, which I’m surprised I didn’t catch the first time. ^^;
    I do the same thing during these election seasons. If I were ever to run, I would run with this bold new strategy called simple, blatant truth. I’d never win, but with luck, I’d turn heads.
    I have seen “The Wire” and loved it, but not “Forbrydelsen”. I’ll have to check it out. I would also recommend “Third Watch” another crime/medical/firefighting drama from the early 2000s, which I’ve always really enjoyed.
    Anyway, thanks again for the critique and potential writing fodder!

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