100 Word Challenge – Week 59.1: Descent

He sat at the edge of the world, twirling the memory in his palm, the last golden band of precious heartbreak taunting him. He had no use for it anymore, but could share it with no one.

With a twitch, the ring was flicked from his finger into the abyss.

But it looked so much different as he followed it down. Its power was gone, wasted on the rocks.  As his wings unfurled to slow his descent, the whispering cry of a ping wished him farewell.  Silently, he nodded and took flight into the unknown. “Goodbye, farewell, and amen.”

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Entry #1 for this week’s 100 Word Challenge from Julia’s Place, based on this image (which I figured out how to include all by myself, huzzah!) :I hope you all enjoy!

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16 thoughts on “100 Word Challenge – Week 59.1: Descent

  1. Lovely and sad piece. Liked the way he watched the ring on his descent – it really added to the suspense of the ending.

  2. I also love the symbolism of the ring that evolves as the story unfolds, even in just 100 words. Well done.

  3. Delft says:

    How nice to have wings that unfurl. (love that word anyway)

    I’m a bit confused now. Is this part of the ongoing story?
    Maybe you could add a tag (title?) to all the posts that belong to the series, then one can read them together …

    • They are handy to things to have in a pinch.
      And I can see what you mean about being part of an ongoing story with my trends in posts. Honestly, I had never considered the possibility of tying them together into a continuing story. But perhaps I should.
      Thank you for the idea!

  4. Eva Said says:

    I could feel the emotions! Great prompt!

  5. CoffeeCurls says:

    I am going to admit I wasn’t sure if this was a man or a bird (feathered, not lady!) – I’m going with that it was a man and the wings were metaphorical; but were they?

    • A good question, isn’t it? Did he fall with the ring and take flight when they both hit bottom, or did he fly into the clouds now that he was no longer weighed down? Or maybe both. It’s really up to your interpretation.
      Thank you for reading!

  6. Mayumi-H says:

    I really like the melancholy feel of this piece. Your angelic protagonist has a lot of weight in him, but that release at the end is quietly beautiful.
    Nice!

  7. I had similar feelings when I saw the image. The way you had the mans thoughts surround the ring of pain was fabulous. Well done ..!!!
    Isadora
    I would love to have you drop by my blog and have a look at what I’ve written. The deadline passed too quickly for me this time.
    http://insidethemindofisadora.wordpress.com/2012/10/02/100-word-challlenge-for-grown-ups-week59-despair/

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