Five Sentence Fiction – Part 1: Devotion to Faith

How long has it been since we slept now, three, four days? It’s certainly been that long since the last rations were passed around. Wonder if they can see our empty rifles from there, or the shadows of death over our line. So why don’t they run us over like limping cattle, what was holding them back when not even the ground under our boots favored us?

“Simple,” I was told from an old friend long gone, “because they know if they crush us here, thousands will rise from our bones to wash their filth away back into the sands.”


Entry # 1 of 3 for this week’s Five Sentence Fiction from Lillie McFerrin. The prompt was “devotion”, and with so many applications for that feeling, I couldn’t stop at just one. Silly me, I know.

I hope you all enjoy!

9 thoughts on “Five Sentence Fiction – Part 1: Devotion to Faith

  1. McGuffyAnn says:

    Very nice.

  2. 4joy says:

    brave soldiers denying the inevitable…probably really happened like that in wartimes….

  3. Mayumi-H says:

    I really like the mingling of quiet despair and defiance, here. The first paragraph in particular is full of a lot of heartbreaking feeling that’s eerie and accurate and all-too-believable.
    Nicely done!

  4. Thoughts that fill minds while waiting for the inevitable… very well done!

  5. Andrew says:

    I sensed the hopelessness, the soul-destroying ravages of war. Lovely writing.

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