Five Sentence Fiction: Ringing

It rises from the depths, a scream dipping with bane and disdain for all around it. Nothing is safe from its wrath; one shrill note to empty the lands and driving the wildlife into the winds. It comes from the darkness without warning and without remorse. Only until a mighty hand rises from the mortal world to defeat it will it be silenced.

Or at least muted for another ten minutes thanks to the wonderfully addicting “Snooze” button.

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My entry for this week’s 5 Sentence Fiction from Lillie McFerrin. The challenge was “Ringing”, and we all have fought this enemy before. It is evil, ruthless and merciless, and often very rude. So take comfort in the days where it doesn’t come looking for you.

I hope you all enjoy.

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5 thoughts on “Five Sentence Fiction: Ringing

  1. K R Smith says:

    “It comes from the darkness without warning and without remorse.”

    Loved that sentence – and a great change of tone at the end. From fantasy to real world in five sentences. I liked that!

  2. Mayumi-H says:

    Ha ha! Another light-spirited take on what I thought would be something darker. Nicely done!

    The lush imagery here reminds of your earlier post (“Last Echo”), but you turn it around to something whimsical at the end. That shows a strong grasp of style. 🙂

    The only critique I have is that I think the verb in this line – …and driving the wildlife into the winds… should be “drive,” to agree with the one before (…to empty the lands…). The agreement comes for the “to”: “to empty” and “to drive.” If you wanted to keep it “driving,” I’d make the suggestion of changing it to:
    …one shrill note to empty the lands[,] driving the wildlife into the winds.

    Nice work, though! I liked it a lot, and it brought a smile to my face. 😀

  3. josie2shoes says:

    Loved it, loved it! Very well crafted to throw us off course until the end!

  4. McGuffyAnn says:

    I liked this…the stuff nightmares are made of.

  5. Lizzie Koch says:

    Oh this is good. I was really sucked in, expecting the worse and then you change the tone completely. . .although that alarm going off in the morning is just the worse. Brilliant! x

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