Five Sentence Fiction: Desolate Home

The room had been warm once, alight with oak segments glowing with embers hugging them to bring symbol to the scene. But it had been truly alive because of those who once filled the space with their own warmth, their own love. Never overloaded with material, never stripped of its comforts, it was theirs to call home, or at least it used to be.

Passing his hands over dusty mantle and abandoned shelves, he stopped to ask his companion “How long has it been, since, ya know, they…died”

“That’s not for me to know,” it answered, gazing out into the clouded dusk, “They were important to you, not me.”

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Entry #1 for this week’s Five Sentence Fiction from Lilie McFerrin. The prompt was “Desolate”, which usually implies a large scale, doesn’t it? But to some, a room is a universe.

I hope you all enjoy.

 

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5 thoughts on “Five Sentence Fiction: Desolate Home

  1. Once loved ones leave, the most comfiest of rooms can feel desolate. You’ve captured that feeling here very well. xx

  2. Mayumi-H says:

    I like the subtle description of the “it” companion, here, and the words that follow. So very detached, discompassionate. It’s perfect for a demon or familiar unused to the complexities of the human heart. In a twisted way, it reminds me of a more sympathetic version of Barker’s Yattering.

    Really nice work with the room, too, especially the word choices. They’re fresh, and the varied sentence structure makes the piece come alive, even in a melancholy way.

  3. McGuffy Ann says:

    I like this. Very deep.

  4. neenslewy says:

    A good read, you have captured the feelings in these sentences.

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