Five Sentence Fiction – 2 of 2: Home Without

Aching floorboards creaked with every step as he passed through the abandoned halls of what once was his life. He could walk every inch with his eyes shut, since he had laid every one of them down.

It followed him without thought or word until he stopped at one particular room, “You spent a lot of time in this doorway, the imprint here is strong.  Why here?”

“Yea, I remember…I was always working when they went to bed, so I … this is how I would see them,”  he started before dropping to a knee as the years reminded him how long it had been since any warmth roamed these timbers.

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And entry #2 for this week’s Five Sentence Fiction from Lillie Mcferrin. Which oddly enough is continuing a storyline from a couple other posts. Who knows, they might just shape themselves into an actual story one day…

Either way, I hope you all enjoy

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6 thoughts on “Five Sentence Fiction – 2 of 2: Home Without

  1. McGuffy Ann says:

    This is powerful, and needs to be expanded.

  2. Mayumi-H says:

    I really like this storyline and these characters. The protagonist is so emotionally honest in this state, and his companion offers some great observations, like a physical conscience. I hope you do more of these two!

  3. Thank you, Mayumi!
    I definitely want to do more with these two, as there is a good story here I think. I too want to know more about them

  4. You create quite an atmosphere. I adore the wording of “aching floorboards”.

  5. […] it’s been a while since I’ve revisited this on-going scene. But it’s one that continues to grow as our […]

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